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Student's Writing
There is a swimming pool in our town.
It is amazing.
I will go to swimming pool with my classmates tomorrow.
I will swim in the swimming pool.
I like paddle.
It's very interesting.
I can't forget my swimming suit.
Teacher came, too.
We will swim all morning.
And we will have lunch and come back home.


Teacher's Comment

There is a swimming pool in our town.

It is amazing.

I will go to the swimming pool with my classmates tomorrow.

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I will swim in the swimming pool.

I like paddle jumping and splashing in the water.

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It's very interesting.

I can't forget my swimming suit.swimsuit.

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My Teacher will come / is going to come / is coming came, too.

teacher ó·³ ¼¿¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¸í»ç´Â Àý´ë È¥ÀÚ ¿ÀÁö ¾Ê´Â´Ù°í Çß¾î¿ä.

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We will swim all morning.

And we will have lunch and come back home.

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And we will come back home and have lunch.

We will swim all morning and then come back to my house to have lunch.